Tainted Temple
I have to admit, I was nervous reading this because I was going into it trying to think of something nice to say. The protagonist is really irritating in how arrogant he is but I love the trope of the wise old man who was gonna teach this guy a lesson. The imagery of the shop and the dragon is really well written too. I’m confused by the ending, and wondering what the old man meant by “giving him what he needed” since the protagonist fears for his life and the dragon keeps eating his other tattoos. I’m hoping for a part 2 that will explain this and give closure on the story. But other than that, I had a lot of fun reading it and I looked forward to his next writing
Still Night
Once again I was impressed by my classmates’ work. Quite a departure from the last modern day story, this one is about a doctor in the Victorian age who is summoned to a home to deliver a baby in the dead of night. The language used makes it clear that the protagonist is a well learnt man and has been in the medical practice for so long that he keeps medical tools in his home. The way that he describes things is so positive and flowery that I didn’t even realize that the baby he delivered was strangled by the umbilical cord and that the mother might die until I read the story a second time.
It’s very well written but the protagonist’d constant positive attitude is very unnerving all things considered. Even when he delivers a dead baby he doesn’t really let that put a damper on his night. I’m not 100 percent sure if this is intentionally done, but it’s a clever character choice to color the story
The Knight and the Dragon
It’s a classic story of a good knight fighting against a fierce dragon for the hand of the beautiful princess, but with a twist. This works as a children’s story because of how idealistic the setting is, as the protagonist is quickly accepted as the king’s son despite being adopted, being beloved by everyone despite not having any stated accomplishments except for being a knight and participating in jousting tournaments, and the kingdom being okay with their favorite knight sparing a dragon they wanted dead. I don’t have a problem with the story, I still liked reading it. But the knight suddenly getting a potion from a wizard who wasn’t mentioned before seems kind of forced and there are a few grammatical errors that bother me. It’s a good idea and I like the way the author phrases things, but I think that it still needs work with the story structure and world building
Lunar Writing 