Click
To be honest, it’s pretty chilling to read this after dark, like I did for the first time. With an innocent title like “Click” (thankfully unrelated to the god awful Adam Sandler movie of the same name) you would normally thinking that it would be related to technology, so it’s shocking when it turns into a horror story. While I thought that it was an interesting concept, it doesn’t really go very far before the story ends, so I’d like it to be longer. Other than that, good job!
HER
Honestly, this story is so heartbreaking that it almost made me cry the first time I read it. I’m not exactly sure what I was expecting with a title like HER, but I didn’t expect this. I really thought that things would get better for the little girl, like she would get a new friend or would get taken away by Child Protective Services, but sadly real life isn’t like a fairy tale.
Her life just got worse as no one was there for the girl as she grew up, resorting to dangerous and illegal activities to distract herself from her intense negative emotions. Eventually, the girl’s terrible life choices caught up with her and she got arrested. It’s a very realistic story, to the point where I’m worried about the author. It brings up social issues that need to be addressed more than they are, because one toxic person can easily poison another, especially if they are a small child. I can relate to being around someone who doesn’t have your best interests in mind and tends to ignore you while claiming to do the opposite. I hope for the best for everyone in class.
Road to Pokemon Champion
This is probably the only story that we’ll get that is actually fanfiction. I’m uncomfortable with the implication that the Pokemon nicknamed Rachel has a crush on her trainer but luckily that doesn’t go anywhere as the story isn’t finished. I’m aware that it’s hard to write at times, I’ve had a dry spell that lasted for months… but it’s common courtesy to finish your assignments on time. I’d like the story to be original. Fanfiction is very base and limited, and I feel like the themes presented are often very inappropriate for polite company or a classroom setting. I think if the author took another crack at it with their own ideas then it could be a good story. The narration is very natural and flowing, more than the past two stories so I can see potential
