I do love suspenseful stories, but the use of the word curdle in the first place confuses me. Although waking up with your hands red just sounds like waking up to your period starting. All joking aside, I do like the mystery involved of what the hell is actually happening while the protagonist keeps waking up to different horrifying scenes, usually involving another version of themselves and their mother being killed.

I’m confused that at some point the protagonist is forced to kill his mother fifteen times before he realizes he’s in hell? The only explanation we’re given is that the protagonist is in hell for killing his mother and forced to relieve that action for a long time. I liked the mystery, but it isn’t solved clearly. I really don’t understand why he goes from saying that his mother abused him for 15 years to calling her a guardian angel

We haven’t really had a part two for a story written yet but I like how it starts right after the first part ended. I theorized last time she might not be aware of being a werewolf, but that’s clearly not the case and she even has a clean up guy. Though she’s still really upset about murdering her guests so we know that it wasn’t intentional.

The flashback is used well to show what happened to Malcolm, showing that Jennifer has PTSD over what her other personality forces her to do on a monthly basis. And… she ends up killing herself in the last page because she can’t take the guilt of killing so many people, even though she had someone in her life who was trying to help.

That’s really heavy… I really don’t like talking about suicide but I kind of have to now. I just feel like that’s a terrible way to end a story and feels very rushed, but I liked the other parts that showed how Jennifer got away with murder all these years.

I love the line “shaggy blonde hair that would make any surfer jealous” It’s pretty easy to see Cameron as a child psychologist, I think that would really suit him. I’ve seen him with his three year old son and he never gets bent out of shape. But the personality of the characters are much different from Cameron and Calvin and Cameron’s parents aren’t much like how the psychologist’s mom and dad are described.

This takes me back to my childhood. I’ve spent most of my time with about a dozen different psychologists, psychiatrists and school therapists being required to talk to them about how I was feeling to the point where I felt extremely resentful. Like there was something wrong with me. But I really enjoyed talking to a psychologist at Kaiser and I cried a lot when I was younger talking to him.

Reading further I’m realizing that the psychologist might be an exorcist which is pretty awesome. The characters are realistic and fun to read, I can say with experience this is how counseling sessions could go in real life and I look forward to a part two

This story has really good descriptions of the protagonist’s home and the strict childhood they recount bitterly being raised by a single mother based on how the protagonist describes their upbringing. It sounds like their mother was well off but had a very cold attitude towards their child and didn’t tolerate rule breaking. For God’s sake she locked her kid in a closet, who does that?? That’s probably why the main character is so distant when talking about the house and barely mention their mother’s passing, being the reason they returned to their childhood home. Their father is only mentioned in pictures and letters, looking upon them as an adult the protagonist is upset but not from his absence. It seems to me more like they’re jealous because their mother didn’t seem to care about their child very much, but always looked so happy in pictures with the main character’s father and wrote letters to him with love and passion.

I know that the title is the Dragon Returns but we never even find out why it’s called that. I was pretty disappointed that we got another self insert fanfiction that isn’t even finished and it wasn’t even as good as the last one. If I didn’t read the Bleach manga when I was eight and again in high school I would be completely lost. It’s really alienating for the reader in a general fiction writing class and not much even happens in the story, it’s mostly just descriptions and no interactions with other characters so there’s not even much to say about it.

This was a lot more scary to read than the last edition, I couldn’t finish it the first time reading because it was after dark. I like that the author kept the previous scenes especially the part with the finger. I thought that it was really well written. The new parts with the protagonist trying to run away from the existential terror was really good. They drive all night and start to think that they were imagining the whole thing when they find a diner, something that hasn’t disappeared but they are sadly mistaken and resign to their fate. Even their memories of the horror plaguing them disappears at the end which I thought was really horribly creepy and I love stuff like that.

This was really hard to get through because I can completely understand how the author is feeling. I went through a terrible relationship for three years that only ended because I couldn’t take it anymore. I don’t ever want to date again. In that kind of intense first relationship it’s too easy to lose yourself and become his girlfriend and nothing else. Like he will try to make you into himself and get angry at you often for not being perfect. It’s really scary what a person will put up with if someone says “I love you” enough times and gets you nice things. I’m really glad I broke it off or he would still be trying to control everything about me that was different than him and I would still be so stressed and miserable all the time. I’m glad that the author is away from such a toxic person and I hope they can find a way to be happy

Suddenly I’m reminded of the movie Coco with all of the spanish culture and the characters talking about the Day of the Dead and stuff. I really like the characters, they’re really fun to read about and they have realistic problems and day to day issues. I just wish that the story was longer, I feel like the author is setting up some kind of spooky adventure, or maybe that’s me just hoping for it since I love the movie Coco so much. I’m looking forward for more, regardless

This was a really emotional and gripping story. Just writing about it in a review is pretty difficult for me since my grandfather died in hospice a couple years ago. Being torn between the game he loved and the father he loved more than anything, a young boy has to play in a game he didn’t have the heart to play anymore because his father had a heart attack. Because his dad had insisted that he go because it was so important to both of them, he missed his father’s last moments. Even so he knew what he would have wanted and won the game, saying goodbye on the court.

You always know that when a character in fiction says something like “Nothing could go wrong for me” that they’re basically inviting disaster into their lives and the audience knows that some kind of shit is going to go down. I love the different titles for the story and the name “Steve Stevenson,” it’s so ridiculous. I don’t think that anyone in this age would forgive their fiancee for cheating on them with their dumbass milkman so this character must be a really nice guy. I really liked the story in how the author makes despair funny but the story seems incomplete. I’d love to find out how the protagonist moved on and got back on his feet and how he eventually forgave his ex-fiancee and the milkman, I’m hoping for a part two.